(Revision Essay- 1)

Bryant Park Trip

 

A man was sitting on the step, leaning down and putting his elbows on his knees and moving his hands on his cheeks. Also, he is moving his body and looking people who are nearby to him. Sometimes he touches his teeth with his fingers. Then he keeps his hands in his pockets, and looking around. After a few moments, he is looking at girls who are sitting next to him and tries to talk with them, but they don’t respond. Then he stand ups and walks to the field. When he is walking, he is also looking at the sky. Finally, he is walking to the street and takes a bus.

  A black guy wearing a blue shirt and black pants is on a chair and eating a sandwich. He also is drinking a Snapple while eating the sandwich. Then he takes out his money bag and starts to count money. He touches his phone and looks at something over the phone. Then he starts to laugh himself and looks around silently. He starts to eat his food quickly and starts to count money again. At that moment, he calls someone.  He starts to talk loudly and waving his hand. Finally, he stands up quickly and begins to walk as quickly as possible.

A young lady sits on the chair silently and reads on an 'i Pad'. She wears a red sweater, and blue pants. Her hair is very long and sometimes she touches her heads. Her sweater is moving because of wind, and she puts it back. Sometimes she moves her body and reads her electronic book. Then an old black man comes to her and starts to talk with her. She is giving answers when the old man asks her something. A few moments later, she talks more loudly with that guy until she takes her bag and walks away on the street.

A pigeon is sleeping. After 4 or 5 minutes, the pigeon begins to move and walk slowly. The feathers of its body are dirty with one of them broken. One of its legs is broken and it searching for food; pigeon only stops upon finding something to eat.  The pigeon meets with some other pigeons and begins to bit and peck at them. All pigeons do the same, and they have a fight breaks out. Then the original pigeon leaves far away from them and eats more food. It goes to the place where the sun is shining, and it sits on a broken table.